Peer Edits

Example: 1. LEAD AND BACKUP: Does the story begin with one long sentence that answers most of the 5Ws and H without going into detail? What questions are left unanswered? Are they answered in the second paragraph? Are more details provided (names, more specific places, times)? What questions do you still have after the first two paragraphs or what do you most want to know? How could this section be improved?

Jessica's Peer Edit: The begining sentence covers 4 of the 5w's. Eastview, 2010, Seniors, graduation. There is no how though in the first sentence. The questions left unanswered are why and how. These are answered in the second paragraph. There arent any really specific times or anything but the phrase "nothing is set in stone yet". This paper could be improved by cutting down the ambiguity (spell check).

Peter's Peer Edit: The begining sentence covers most of the details but in brief while the second sentence goes on to explain that it was the Eastview Frisbee team last weekend at the Hopkins Hustle. In the second and even third paragraph he goes on to explain what the tournament is and how it works. The only questions I have after reading the first part of his story is how the team feels they are doing during the season and their predictions for the rest of the season.